(@Oak Yeah, my original idea was for the "mob" to chase Purple out of town because his earthquake caused property damage but it's interesting to see how that went.) where Harry was (We're not making this SAO, and if we are, we're going to finish the damn goals while making the stupid harem - we have a male name to work with so let's use that) (also not sure if the whole 'stopping zombie apocalypse' was clear enough to clear a goal but w/e)
(Goal Achieved: The protagonist is awarded a medal for a good deed) Spoiler: Pending Goals - The protagonist is awarded a medal for a good deed. - The protagonist finds out they have a mysterious power. - The protagonist is expelled from their hometown. - A male ally joins the protagonist's party (he carries its own weapon).
If they could (ninjas man...) (He hadn't eaten brains in a long time so he was already malnourished and exhausted, and made to break dance on top of that so passed out. Geez Oak, zombies can faint too, little racist assuming they can't.) (Also I pictured in my mind that it was an extremely localized earthquake. Like in the pokemon anime normally they just rip holes in the ground. Though if it affected something in town that would be a good reason to expel him later)
(I remember Oak saying that mob has angry implications all the time. So can we have the mob go angry somehow cause that's how faggotry and herd mentality works in humans. In the end, getting Purple expelled? uwu)
(There is no reason why it can't be a happy flash mob. First Oak says zombies can't exhaust themselves to the point of fainting, now mobs have to be bloodthirsty as the old French revolutionaries? Profiling much.)
(pronoun ambiguity strikes again!) (also the girl protagonist joins later, order of events pls) , said Harry, who (The comma at the beginning should come before toby's closed quotes if we're being grammatical. Punctuation always has to so remember to close your quotes only after inserting punctuation)
(this is officially a mess) you somewhere," said (why is no one surprised that Harry just suddenly showed up?) (especially since Purple said Harry got eaten I mean really)
(No, not really.) (It was a dream goddamnit! However we still have a noticeable plothole in here. Has Purple woken up or is he still in the Dream World? Rember, you can some crazy shit in dreams.)
(pls I obviously meant "why are the people in the story [i.e. the females] not surprised that Harry just showed up" after Purple lied to them) (but now I can just continue the story that way so) Purple lied, and
Spoiler: Goals - The protagonist is awarded a medal for a good deed. - The protagonist finds out they have a mysterious power. - The protagonist is expelled from their hometown. - A male ally joins the protagonist's party (he carries its own weapon). mother's killer? Why