[Waiting Jugde] WB3 (Warlords Battlecry 3)

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  1. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    I have the code, so i need to add some codes and fix another, i need more time, but i will post all codes made for me(I NEED HELP)

    Added author Shazan to help me so much in build part,
    Added The Swarm and Mega Swarm (convert),
    Reduction Spawn list.
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    Fairy now transform (convert) Sheep to Fairy Dragon, add kill to dragon (Well, maybe some chance)
    Knight, Ssrathi and Minotaur know your's sides
    Safe Guard Added to Noble Elf, Plague and Wood Elf.
    Evolve The swarm to Mega Swarm fail chance added in 50%.
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    Changed the Role Winmsg
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    Changed Kill Msg
    Add 5 sheep
    Add recharge time to Fairy Dragon
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    Ssrathi and Plague can convert sheep too, to Naga(Monsters) and Hydra(Demon)
    Hydra need to evolve To Fire or Frost, so i think to put a random, example, the student from school.
    Some english correction (i got help)
    Add more spawn list
    Add some custom names commands
    Add Barbarian, i changed the Safeguard from Noble elf to put in barbarian, and hes got Expose, (Maybe chance here)
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    Fix Fairy /Transform bug
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    Add immunity poison from Ssrathi and Swarm (Mega Swarm)
    Replace to random convert to Hydra
    Add Four Random Elemental (Fire, Water, Earth and Wind)
    Remove Reveal Daykill from Imperium (To equal the demon)
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    Write again some msg
    Change some race to put more sheep
    Removed Demon reveal day kill (i forget)
    Repair convert's command.
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    Added Detox for Knight and Wood Elf
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    Some fixes
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    Next:
    Try find the best translation for theme (the link stands above of this post or the last link in the last post).
     
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  2. -Mike-

    -Mike- hi

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    Bolds don't work in titles. Also, is this peak or nonpeak? Because there are so less roles :(
     
  3. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    yep, sorry
     
  4. Shazan

    Shazan Obey to Kyubey

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    I am a little confused. It's this theme complete or not?
    You know, you should insert the code inside the
    hide
    tag to divide the code from the rest of your post.
    And a comment and an explanation about how your theme works with the sides or roles description would be useful to make it easier for the others to understand your theme, so we can help you with less missjudgements.

    P.S.
    You don't have to do a win message for any role, but only one per side and from what i see you have only 2 sides: good and evil, so delete all that sides winmsg and substitute them with the messages for good and evil sides
     
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  5. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    it is the some code, so isnot finished, thanks shazan
     
  6. IceKirby

    IceKirby A.K.A. RiceKirby

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    If it's not finished yet, you should ask a moderator to move this thread to Mafia Critique section.
    Also, "help" is the message the player see when the game begins, "info" is the message anyone can see when using /roles, so you should fix your all your "info" fields (it doesn't make sense for them to be like "You can do X").
     
  7. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    well, request to move send kirby
     
  8. Shazan

    Shazan Obey to Kyubey

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    Look from what i can see i guess this is your first theme, so here some thoughts.
    1) As it is now your theme is incomplete, if it is a nonpeak theme requires to let play from 3-4 players to 10-13 players and your theme doesn't meet the 3-4 minimum players requirement. Instead if you wanted to do a standard theme: you should make it able to be played at least from 5 to 40 players but instead your theme as it is now can have only 11 players.
    Try to expand your theme.
    2) Your theme is not really much original or at least with an interesting gameplay.
    I suggest you to examine the most popular themes and understand what makes them good. After that: use your creativity and immagination and try to invent an innovative strategy for your theme and when you have done it: build new roles that would work well with your strategy idea.
    3) As it is now you Monsters team is really weak, the roles of this team doesn't know each other risking so that the partners will kill each others and your Ssrathi can only inspect making for him impossible to win if his partner minotaur is dead, because he has neither a powerful vote or an action to /kill his enemies.
    4) I shouldn't be the one to say this because me too i am terrible on this area but: You should work on the grammar of your messages, they are confusing and difficult to understand.
    5) When you add a new role, remember that the other teams need to have a way to win against it, so try to maintain some sort of balance power on your theme.

    I know that i am annoyng but follow what i am saying and asks for suggestions to expert theme coders and your theme will be better.
     
  9. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    finished the code, and get help to shazan,

    http://pastebin.com/JGiWiisX

    And have the roles now:
    The Eterian Defenders consist the races Imperium, Knight, Noble Elf, Sheep
    The Monsters consist the races Ssrathi and Minotaur
    The Devils consist the races Plague and Demon
    The Forest consist the races Wood Elf and Fairy
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  10. Arid Dream

    Arid Dream Not New Member

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    Well, Villagers win thing says "Peach" instead of what I think is supposed to be peace.

    Actually, just looking at the win messages there is several errors. I would proofread it again.
     
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  11. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    Well, some changes to adapt the game will made, the winmsg has ben fixed, now i working (with some inscruction to shazan) to equal all races and sides!

    Edit 17/02: only changed the winmsg.

    All changes made, comment now allowed again!!!

    I need one english translator fixer to put the theme ready.
     
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  12. Hawkman32

    Hawkman32 Doublade

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    An English translator? You mean like proper grammar etc or translating words. Because I can do grammar not words.
     
  13. Shazan

    Shazan Obey to Kyubey

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    I think that he needs someone that corrects the grammar of the messages of his theme. Sadly i can't help because i am terrible with it too. So if there is another one that can give him an hand with it, would be great.
     
  14. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    The google translator for PT-BR,U.S isn't 100% correct, have another translator online?
     
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    Hawkman32 Doublade

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    I could try to translate
     
  16. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    http://pastebin.com/UAVWKcBK I tried translating what I could understand since I was bored. I noticed you should probably state the sides in the role info.
     
  18. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    Humm, somes words isn't coincide to the commands, but thanks for you help.
    I maintain the original link case need to review my transation, so i edited some error's, this is a link from Mafia translated
    http://pastebin.com/dET0m9Xx
     
  19. Hearth

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    Well I couldn't understand everything.>_> and np
     
  20. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    Can you explain better, the parts who you cannot understand?

    I Edited the Link again: http://pastebin.com/WMbY4dDQ

    Case approve, I might consider to go to the review group
     
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  21. Hearth

    Hearth Member

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    It is still your theme so I dont really care what you do with it even if it makes no sense after you edit!
     
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  22. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    hummmmm, i think to make one reduction from roles commands and effect's.

    Imperium: /Smash (Day Kill), /spell (Convert Shepps to one Element's)
    Knight: +2 vote and 10% for +3 vote and /safeguard (self)
    Noble Elf: /protect
    Barbarian: /hide (Expose, reveal user), and /humanshield (Safeguard)
    Sheep: No commands, but he is only converted from theme.
    Fire Elemental: /Burn (Poison, 1 day to kill)
    Earth Elemental: /Protect (Only Self), and -3 vote
    Water Elemental: /stalk
    Wind Elemental: /Wind (Distract)
    Ssrathi: /inspect and /transform (convert sheep's to naga)
    Minotaur: /kill
    Swarm: /poison (2 day to kill), /evolve (50% of fail) and 0 vote
    Mega Swarm: /poison (1 day to kill), 1 vote and shared with your team
    Naga: /sing (distract, and rand (1, 2) vote
    Plague:/poison (1 day to kill), /safeguard and /doom (convert sheep's to Hydra)
    Demon: day kill
    Hydra: /evolve( Convert to fire hydra or frost hydra ) and 2 vote
    Fire Hydra:/kill recharge and 2 vote
    Frost Hydra:/frost (distract) and 2 vote
    Wood Elf: 30% evade kill, /safeguard and 3 vote
    Fairy: /expose (not revelated), /transform (convert sheep's to Fairy Dragon) and random vote 1 or -1
    Fairy Dragon:/kill, recharge 1 night
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    I will repairs some commands, again, but tomorrow.
     
  23. Hearth

    Hearth Member

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    Just want to point out something: No matter how fantastic if your theme maybe if people can't read it their not going to play it.Most of your sentences are not grammatically correct and the occasional spelling mistakes are still quite evident in your theme and if you try reading it, you can't even get past the first line.
     
  24. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    you have the translator, so i get yor translate, this case http://pastebin.com/UAVWKcBK , but, let's me fix some forgot commands from the last past, i changed the last translate for this:
    "info": "Can Inspect. Doesn't know their partner. Can /transform sheeps. Immune to poison. Sided with monsters.

    But look the specific command.

    "startup": "team-reveal-with-roles",

    He know your alies, only fix this and i accept your translation, this error appears on Ssrathi, Minotaurs,

    And from Swarm, try look my last post to fix your translate.
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    Well, i get the Heart translate,

    Edit: Now i edited the Hearth translation, and add the kill distractor from minotaur.

    http://pastebin.com/J8ry79ek
     
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  25. Scatterbrain

    Scatterbrain You only live once*

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    You know, despite Yentero being new and all this is so much more productive than 90% of the TC&I threads out there. Sure, they may have ideas but there's a clearly defined starting point and an ending point coming up very soon [from what I'm implying].

    What we need here in Theme Critique and Improvement is a bunch of people communicating with others over mafia themes, and a bunch of people who are willing to help. For example, I'm helping Shazan translate his Trust+ theme, and Hawkman32 is helping translate this theme.

    Though a complex system of back and forth additions to a theme isn't the best way to go, especially considering when we have programs like Stypi, piratepad, meetingwords, etc. that allows collaboration to excel (and would trim months off this theme's due date) theme making should be made a more fun and rewarding passion than just granting yourself the self satisfaction of having your name under /themeinfo [theme].

    If I didn't make sense, bear with me. I think we need more activity and input in Theme Critique and Improvement. There are so many dead threads here, and some of them are recent. I'll admit, I'm victim of just reading some of these threads. But we all need to communicate just what we want to see from a Mafia theme, instead of complaining about it on the threads after it's published (should they put the thread here before they put it in Review).
     
  26. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    Refers the WB3 in the another session, sorry, this time i dont know, Shazan told to continue here, for now, only rest to translate and review again, so, you right, the Theme Critique and Improvement is not activity, but the dead themes is one cause the reduction from Mafia QC reading the dead themes, but, is isn't only que Mafia QC to help, but i need some time to learn the english, but in commands im best, the Shazan help me to understand the commands, and i make the roles with some help to Shazan, the convert i did it alone, so, the translation im not good, and i got help for this, it is a history for this first theme (or forum activity), now to make the dead themes in activity again, maybe one specific group resolve, now returning for this Theme, i will put the theme info after the official translation, only post the actual is very good or not.
     
  27. Fiery Espeon

    Fiery Espeon The fire never bothered me anyway ~

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    I am sorry but it is really hard to understand what your saying. If you need help typing English, i think you should use a Translator (Other than Google Translate) so we can understand what you are saying so we can help you. If your language is supported in the International part of the Forum, you can talk about your theme there and people who can understand your language can help you. Also, we can use a translator to understand what you need help on. This is a recommendation and suggestion to help the communication problem.
     
  28. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    I would request that you do not use my translation. Thank You.
     
  30. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    OMG, well, maybe day 15 is ready...
     
  31. Hawkman32

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    Btw why does it say ally's I think its Allies. If it has ' it shows Possesion. Also it should be a Ssrathi
     
  32. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    This problem of the translator, i found another error, finally the error helped me :), i working with the google translator now!

    Edit: Well, now i udes the Google Translator: http://pastebin.com/sqDsykAF

    i think to post the result
     
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  33. Fiery Espeon

    Fiery Espeon The fire never bothered me anyway ~

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    One thing: Google Translate isn't accurate and not good for lengthy documents. If you tell us your language, we can help you. Google Translate won't fix most grammatical errors. There's also the fact that the pastebin you have in another language is spelled right and is correct in grammar.
     
  34. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    Hi again, i decide to Try Rewrite this theme, Wait for More test for Aprovation
     
  35. Fiery Espeon

    Fiery Espeon The fire never bothered me anyway ~

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    You must enter your theme in review again.
     
  36. Yentero

    Yentero So na Voadora

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    Wait, i need see the Translation to repair.
     
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    Yentero So na Voadora

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