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  1. DanyBv

    DanyBv New Member

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    It is my first theme so it is simple.
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    {
    "name": "Dany",
    "author": "DanyBrasov",
    "summary": "This is the Dany theme.",
    "border": "*** Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany Dany ***",
    "minplayers": 7,
    "sides": [
    {
    "side": "good",
    "translation": "Good Peoples",
    "winmsg": "±Game: ~Players~ have saved the world from the Mafia!"
    },
    {
    "side": "mafia",
    "translation": "Mafia",
    "winmsg": "±Game: ~Players~ have taken the control of the world!"
    },
    {
    "side": "jealous",
    "translation": "Jealous Peoples",
    "winmsg": "±Game: The Jealousy is everywhere. ~Players~ won!"
    }
    ],
    "roles": [
    {
    "role": "coco",
    "translation": "Coco Godfather",
    "side": "mafia",
    "help": "You are the Coco Godfather. You and the Mafia must kill the president and the FBI. Your vote counts as -3. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone! You can corrupt a player from the FBI with the command /corrupt [name]. You have a 10% chance of corrupting.",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 30
    },
    "corrupt": {
    "command": "convert",
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 11,
    "failChance": 0.9,
    "canConvert": [
    "razvan",
    "cosmin",
    "fbi"
    ],
    "newRole": {
    "razvan": [
    "razvan2"
    ],
    "cosmin": [
    "cosmin2"
    ],
    "fbi": [
    "mafia"
    ]
    },
    "convertmsg": "~Target~ is now ~New~."
    }
    },
    "vote": -3
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "bogdan",
    "translation": "Bogdan The Jealous",
    "side": "jealous",
    "help": "You are Bogdan The Jealous. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone! You can make a player jealous using /mj [name]. You have a 50% chance of making someone jealous. ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 30
    },
    "mj": {
    "command": "convert",
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 11,
    "failChance": 0.5,
    "canConvert": [
    "mafia"
    ],
    "newRole": {
    "mafia": [
    "bogdan"
    ]
    },
    "convertmsg": "~Target~ is now ~New~."
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "claudiu",
    "translation": "Claudiu Mafia",
    "side": "mafia",
    "help": "You are Claudiu from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    },
    "protect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Role",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "narcis",
    "translation": "Narcis Mafia",
    "side": "mafia",
    "help": "You are Narcis from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    },
    "protect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Role",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "razvan2",
    "translation": "Razvy Mafia",
    "side": "mafia",
    "help": "You are Razvy from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    },
    "protect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Role",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "cosmin2",
    "translation": "Cosmy Mafia",
    "side": "mafia",
    "help": "You are Cosmy from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    },
    "protect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Role",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "mafia",
    "translation": "Mafia",
    "side": "mafia",
    "help": "You are part of the Mafia. You must kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "dany",
    "translation": "President Dany",
    "side": "good",
    "help": "You are the Dany President. You and the FBI must kill the mafia and the godfather. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone ! Your vote counts as 3. Type /inspect [name] to discover a player role. ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 30
    },
    "inspect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Self",
    "priority": 30
    }
    },
    "vote": 3
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "razvan",
    "translation": "Razvy FBI",
    "side": "good",
    "help": "You are Razvy from the FBI. You must protect the President Dany and kill the Godfather and the Mafia. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    },
    "protect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Role",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "cosmin",
    "translation": "Cosmy FBI",
    "side": "good",
    "help": "You are Cosmy from the FBI. You must protect the President Dany and kill the Godfather and the Mafia. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    },
    "protect": {
    "target": "AnyButSelf",
    "common": "Role",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    },
    {
    "role": "fbi",
    "translation": "FBI",
    "side": "good",
    "help": "You are part of the FBI. You must kill the Godfather and the Mafia. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone ! ",
    "actions": {
    "night": {
    "kill": {
    "target": "AnyButTeam",
    "common": "Team",
    "priority": 10,
    "broadcast": "role"
    }
    }
    }
    }
    ],
    "roles1": [
    "razvan",
    "claudiu",
    "narcis",
    "cosmin",
    "dany",
    "coco",
    "bogdan",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "bogdan",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "bogdan",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "bogdan",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "bogdan",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "bogdan",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "mafia",
    "fbi",
    "bogdan",
    "mafia",
    "fbi"
    ]
    }[/HIDE]
    Roles:
    Good Peoples

    President Dany
    Help Text: You are the Dany President. You and the FBI must kill the mafia and the godfather. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone ! Your vote counts as 3. Type /inspect [name] to discover a player role.
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Inspect:
    Vote counts as 3.

    Razvy FBI
    Help Text: You are Razvy from the FBI. You must protect the President Dany and kill the Godfather and the Mafia. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Protect: Shared with role.

    Cosmy FBI
    Help Text: You are Cosmy from the FBI. You must protect the President Dany and kill the Godfather and the Mafia. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Protect: Shared with role.

    FBI
    Help Text: You are part of the FBI. You must kill the Godfather and the Mafia. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.


    Mafia

    Coco Godfather
    Help Text: You are the Coco Godfather. You and the Mafia must kill the president and the FBI. Your vote counts as -3. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone! You can corrupt a player from the FBI with the command /corrupt [name]. You have a 10% chance of corrupting.
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Corrupt: Convert. Shared with team. Has a 90% chance of failing.
    Can convert to Razvy FBI to Razvy Mafia, Cosmy FBI to Cosmy Mafia or FBI to Mafia.
    Vote counts as -3.

    Claudiu Mafia
    Help Text: You are Claudiu from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Protect: Shared with role.

    Narcis Mafia
    Help Text: You are Narcis from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Protect: Shared with role.

    Razvy Mafia
    Help Text: You are Razvy from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Protect: Shared with role.

    Cosmy Mafia
    Help Text: You are Cosmy from the Mafia. You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone and type /protect [name] to protect someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Protect: Shared with role.

    Mafia
    Help Text: You are part of the Mafia. You must kill the President and the FBI. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone !
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.


    Jealous Peoples

    Bogdan The Jealous
    Help Text: You are Bogdan The Jealous. Type /Kill [name] to kill someone! You can make a player jealous using /mj [name]. You have a 50% chance of making someone jealous.
    Abilities:
    Night Actions:
    Kill: Shared with team.
    Mj: Convert. Shared with team. Has a 50% chance of failing.
    Can convert Mafia to Bogdan The Jealous.
    [/HIDE]
     
    Last edited: Mar 17, 2013
  2. Fuzzysqurl

    Fuzzysqurl baa baa mareep I do what I want Server Owner Developer I do what I want Server Owner Developer

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    There's quite a few things to improve on.

    For one, many of your roles have like
    "You are Claudiu from the Mafia . You must protect the Godfather and kill the President and the FBI . Type /Kill [name] to kill someone !"
    There's no command to /protect though. The help is somewhat misleading.

    "You are the Dany President . You and the FBI must kill the mafia and the godfather . Your vote counts as 3 ."
    The command Dany President has is an inspect. This is not stated anywhere and I'd assume the command was kill.


    We also privately tested the game with 9 players and 4 died night 1. This is nearly half of your players, in one night, in that small of a game. Other than that the theme is pretty basic. There's nothing too special, only kill, protect, and inspect.

    I feel like like it could be a good start to a theme, but right now it is very basic. As we get more and more themes, you need to have a way for your theme to stand out in the crowd otherwise it will slump to the bottom of the bucket and rarely be played.

    Unfortunately I do have to Decline [1], but if there are substantial changes that makes it more unique and diverse, I will be happy to reconsider.
     
  3. citro

    citro CRYING LIGHTNING

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    basically what Fuzzy said; it's too basic, misleading, and the sheer imbalance of sides will make this pretty boring to play. sorry, decline [2]
     
  4. Katia

    Katia Haxy Haxy!

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    I agree. Decline [3]
     
  5. Roild

    Roild Member

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    If you decide to change the theme a bit more. Maybe lower the kill count, possibly add more strategy to this theme, fix up the wordings of each role, then maybe it can be reviewed again. For now, I'm going to have to Decline [4].
     
  6. two sides of one coin

    two sides of one coin sick of all her shit

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    Usually naming the theme after yourself doesn't get the QC members off to a positive start...just a thought, my President
     
  7. Hey Day

    Hey Day Argumentum ad ignorantium

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    Decline [5]

    Author is non-responsive, and basically the other QC criticisms; too basic, too misleading, and has too many kills.
     
  8. Not L

    Not L Fairy Princess

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    Decline [6] Same as others
     
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